Formal Response to Mark Edmundon's Essay

I wanted to post some of the issues I had with writing my formal response to Mark Edmundson's essay...just a response and hoping I can sort them out before the next formal response (: In the beginning, it was definately obvious to me that I agreed with what he was saying. It's apparent around JMU, seeing the brochures and website as a senior in high school that it was very aimed towards a consumerist culture. I couldn't quite grasp the actual assignment until halfway through my first draft...it was hard for me to consider both the rhetorical aspects and Edmundson's views at the same time. I ended up having to separate them and approach them separately then combine them for the final product. Another big problem I had was providing enough examples to support my claims, which ironically was what I was arguing Edmundson does very well throughout his essay. Overall, I felt like drafting and redrafting, as well as making outlines and webs helped me organize my thoughts, because there was so much in this essay and assignment to consider.